Aug 26 2014

Quote for my current feelings


We are all just like a bird in a cage, but some of us are more aware of the bars. Quote on blog of J Lenni Dorner

Aug 24 2014

Birthday Sunday Seven

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A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday. What can you add?

 

The seven WORST ways to spend your birthday:

 

  1. At a funeral. (Yours or a loved one’s.)
  2. In the hospital as a patient, particularly in quarantine or in very long surgery.
  3. At a wedding of someone you love in that way, watching them marry someone else.
  4. Gathered with fake friends who are incredibly mean.
  5. Searching for a missing loved one.
  6. Stuck in the justice system, accused of a crime you didn’t commit.
  7. Alone, lost, and hungry somewhere strange, without hope that the situation will improve.

 

 

Looking at that list, I can honestly say that my birthday wasn’t THAT BAD. Might I have a character in the pipeline who will suffer? “37 Terrible Birthdays” sounds like my kind of story, doesn’t it? Stay tuned…

 

Aug 17 2014

Sunday Seven in LIGHTS

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A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday. What can you add?

This Sunday Seven is inspired by a quote on the label tag attached to a bag of Yogi tea. The word light is so versatile! There are four ways it was used on the label, and I’ve added three more to get this post to seven. Can you expand on this?

 

Live light, travel light, spread the light, be the light. Found on the blog of author J Lenni Dorner


see the light

carry a light to…

light the firelight

 

Aug 10 2014

Sunday Seven Time Travel Adventure

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A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday. What can you add?

 

The seven people I would visit if I could time travel because I think I could convince them that I am a time-traveler:

 

  1. Jesus
  2. Noah
  3. Alfred Hitchcock
  4. H.G. Wells
  5. Ben Franklin
  6. Queen Elizabeth I
  7. One of my own Lenni Lenape ancestors from 5,000 years ago

 

Aug 03 2014

Sunday Seven- Special Delivery Pizza Edition part 2

Sunday Seven image

A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday. What can you add?

My lovely assistant has taken over this Sunday Seven post. She was in Chicago at Gino’s East, where everyone signs the walls, tables, and anything else in reach. Being the loyal and lovely assistant that she is, a shout-out of sorts was left for me… on a Chicago Blackhawks flag. (Amusement at the location has yet to die down.)


J Lenni Dorner's assistant giving a shoutout at Gino's East on E Superior St, Chicago
Her idea for Sunday Seven is, given where she was, pizza toppings. Meat or no meat- this is a two week treat!

(She ordered the Four Cheese Deep Dish, by the way.)

 

Seven Pizza Vegetarian Pizza Toppings at Gino’s East:

 

  1. Asparagus
  2. Green Peppers
  3. Fire roasted red peppers
  4. Onions
  5. Olives
  6. Pineapple
  7. Spinach

 

 

Floppy foldable, deep dish, thick crust — how do you like your pizza?

 

 

 

Jul 31 2014

August 2014 goals

August 2014 goals

goals image
Another month has gone by already. I lost the last two weeks of July due to an unexpected life detour. Nevertheless, it is time to have a look at how I did with my goals:

 

Here’s my current goals and review of goals from the past:

 

The BIG MAIN GOAL:

  • Publish two decent-selling book series

 

2014 Goals:

  • Publish something every week on this blog (ie: Sunday Seven)
  • Have 5000 Twitter followers ~ currently at 3,641 — up 136 from last month!

 

Goals for August:

  • keep up on Twitter follows
  • remember to tweet for #WW #WriterWednesday  and  #ReaderthuRsday #RR
  • try Aloe water
  • Finish reading 3 books
  • Have a fun birthday on the 21st
  • Update / redo what-are-they.com and existenceseries.com
  • Finish up the fantasy writing class
  • Move on to the next lesson in the writing for youth class
  • Visit and comment on 20 other blogs
  • Download the update for my blog theme, whatever that might entail…

 


Stop saying I wish, start saying I will
 

Review of Goals for July:

  • keep up on Twitter follows ~ Semi Accomplished
  • remember to tweet for #WW #WriterWednesday  and  #ReaderthuRsday #RR ~ Accomplished
  • Participate in Camp NanoWriMo  http://campnanowrimo.org/campers/j-lenni-dorner ~ Semi Accomplished  –intended to write 10,000 words, only made it to 5,670
  • Enter the writing contest my instructor recommended ~ Accomplished
  • Keep up with the fantasy writing class ~ A bit behind – partly because my instructor had emergency surgery
  • Move on to the next lesson in the writing for youth class ~ Accomplished submitting one, the next is due Aug 11
  • Visit and comment on 30 other blogs ~ Not sure I made it to 30 blogs. :(
  • Vote and watch #WRiTECLUB2014 every Monday and Thursday ~ Accomplished at first, but I think I missed voting in the last two. :(
  • Update / redo what-are-they.com and existenceseries.com ~ NOT Accomplished– not started… FAIL :(
  • Finish reading 2 books ~ Accomplished

                    Yefon: The Red Necklace by @sahndrafondufe

                    Exquisite Trouble (Iron Horse MC) by Ann Mayburn

                    (Actually read or started reading a few others.)

 

 

Jul 28 2014

Express Yourself My Precious



Express Yourself Meme July image

 

Andy Serkis

Jul 27 2014

Sunday Seven- Special Delivery Pizza Edition part 1

Sunday Seven image

A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday. What can you add?

My lovely assistant has taken over this Sunday Seven post. She was in Chicago at Gino’s East, where everyone signs the walls, tables, and anything else in reach. Being the loyal and lovely assistant that she is, a shout-out of sorts was left for me… on the Chicago Blackhawks flag. (Amusement at the location has yet to die down.)


J Lenni Dorner's assistant giving a shoutout at Gino's East on E Superior St, Chicago

Her idea for Sunday Seven is, given where she was, pizza toppings. Meat or no meat- this is a two week treat!

(She ordered the Four Cheese Deep Dish, by the way.)

 

Seven Pizza Meats at Gino’s East:

 

  1. Pepperoni
  2. Italian sausage
  3. Canadian bacon
  4. Bacon
  5. Chicken
  6. Ground beef
  7. Anchovies

 

 

What is your favorite pizza topping?

 

Jul 20 2014

Sunday Seven – Capital C

Sunday Seven image

A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday. What can you add?

 

Seven Capitals that begin with the letter C in US Territory

 

  1. Carson City
  2. Charleston
  3. Cheyenne
  4. Columbia
  5. Columbus
  6. Concord
  7. Charlotte Amalie

 

 

Jul 13 2014

Cooking a Gender Stereotype this Sunday Seven

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A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday. What can you add?

 

While shopping, it was overheard that a young boy said he did not want a “Lord of the Rings Frodo’s Cooking Corner Lego playset” because cooking is for girls. The teenager accompanying the boy responded that Frodo isn’t a girl. The boy replied that Frodo isn’t a person either, he’s a hobbit.

 

The story hits home for me because my nephew has discovered a love of cooking. At eight years old, he’s a regular helper in the kitchen, eager to assist his mom, grandma, dad, and uncle. One day, a boy like the one in the story might say something foolish to him, something like, “cooking is for girls.” I don’t wish to see him crushed. I want to see him smile with pride and fire back against a gender stereotype. Therefore, Zane, this list is for you:

 

Seven People Who are Famous Thanks to Cooking

- and none of them are girls (or hobbits)

 

  1. Alton Brown
  2. Robert Irvine
  3. Emeril Lagasse
  4. Mario Batali
  5. Bobby Flay
  6. Jamie Oliver
  7. Justin Warner

 

Cooking is not just for girls or hobbits. Read more on the blog of J Lenni Dorner

Jul 07 2014

Descriptive Writing Challenge – Bring On the Nouns and Verbs

Blue Dress Writing Challenge brought to you by the blog of J Lenni Dorner
Leave your attempts, or links to your attempts, in the comments! 

Jul 06 2014

Sunday Seven Cities without an A

Sunday Seven image

A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday. What can you add?

Name a city without an A image

CHALLENGE ACCEPTED! 

Cities without an A

  1. Houston
  2. New York City
  3. Delhi
  4. Toronto
  5. Denver
  6. Intercourse
  7. Memphis

 

Jul 03 2014

Express Yourself with a Childhood Toy



Express Yourself Meme July image
Megaminx
Megaminx image

It might seem strange, but this is what I took with me on long car rides, out to dinner to places where people sit around for an hour before eating, and to the homes of relatives that had no children and thus no toys.

This is much like a Rubik’s Cube, except that it’s a pentagon. It was reliably fun for hours.

I also had toy stuffed dog with long ears, but that was for bedtime.

 

Have you ever played with a puzzle game like this?

Jul 01 2014

Learn from Anonymous Beta Readers #writetip

Special thanks to:

Tony, Elliot, Keryn, Cab, Brie, Nicki, Dan, Chris, Pepper, Lianne, Seth, Chris, Rachel, and S.

 

I am grateful for the opportunity to have witnessed a feedback session done by a group of strangers. It is very interesting to learn how some minds perceive a story.

 


writetip

What I learned:

 

1- Not everyone can follow a set up. “Previously on *insert tv show name here*” does not work as well in writing. A paragraph that looks like this will not work for everyone:

      1. exciting action
      2. location, reason for current action
      3. crucial information that is foreshadowing or flashback
      4. subtle setting hint, intriguing reason to read on

 

2- It is very, very, very important to mix up sentence length. This mix up is not enough.

bad length image

- Do not use a 20+ word sentence in the first paragraph.

- Never have multiple 20+ word sentences in the same paragraph.

 

3- One joke is not enough. Just because a scene is high energy and life-or-death does not mean it doesn’t need humor. And it has to be humor that people will get- it has to be obvious.

 

4- Be careful of point of view. Even when in third person omniscient, the audience sometimes can’t follow knowing what’s going in the heads of multiple characters.

 

5- Describe people and places with less adjectives. Even if the audience has never met the people and has never been to the world, and that which is described is important to the story and reveals crucial information, somehow it has to be revealed with less adjectives. BUT, don’t use more words to do this. Also, don’t offer this information right away- some people can’t handle being given a clear picture of the setting and what is at stake. Knowing where and who up front confuses some readers.

Challenge! Using fewer than 50 words and no adjectives, tell someone who has never seen a city what a skyscraper is, how to get to an observation deck, and how to locate the person pictured. No one else will have the hair color that day, but be sure once again to NOT use an adjective to describe it. Originated on the blog of J Lenni Dorner, Learn from Anonymous Beta Readers post.

Leave your entry, or a link to your entry, in the comment section for this post. The best will be selected later.

 

6- Related to point 5, the revelation must be smooth. Don’t just drop the anchor, but lower it slow as a slug. Who the characters are, where they are, what they are doing, and why the reader should care all needs to be laid out, but it can’t be all given at once. Sticking the information inside the action doesn’t make it smooth. In fact, don’t put information in with action, because people can’t understand that. It also can’t jump in with dialog tags, because that will really throw the audience.

 

7- Stay focused.

 

8- Use more dialog. Perhaps mostly dialog.

 

9- If the character has to deal with two things at once, the audience may get confused. Even if one of what the character is dealing with is the entire reason the character is dealing with the second thing, some readers will still get confused.

 

- Tolkin was able to have Frodo pause to fight a monster while on the way to get rid of the ring. The fact that the audience was able to figure that out and follow along is a miracle.

- The fact that children were able to follow along as Harry dealt with horcruxes in order to get to face Voldermort is a wonder.

 

Be that level of talented if your main character has to deal with more than one problem at a time.

 

10- Exposition is evil. No matter how relevant and important it is to the story, it’s evil.

definition of exposition

(For another view, see the “When to tell” section of the hyper-linked article.)

 

11- Relationships matter most. Also, not everyone can gather the relationship between two characters.

-For example, if the main character is a fire fighter, and goes in to a burning building to rescue the only person trapped in the building, not all readers will understand the relationship. (Person who rescues people in burning buildings + person who is trapped in a burning building.) Be sure to paint the picture very clearly. Spell it out. Even when some readers see a person rushing in to a fire, holding a fire axe, and being referred to as a firefighter– they STILL might not know or correctly assume that this character is a firefighter.

 

firefighter image

 

12- If you tell the reader the main character is fighting a fire in a building that is falling down, then show the fire, then show the building falling down, then show the fire some more… some readers will still have no idea what the main character is fighting. “The fire fighter walked through the blaze into the burning building,” is not clear enough for all readers to figure out.

 

13- Make rescue scenes more intense.

 

14- Keep situations very simple.

-Simpler than a firefighter going in to a burning building to save someone, and having to deal with some related fire drama in order to make the save.

 

15- Be cleverly concise.

 

16- Stick with the bounds of the genre of your story. People will be glad you did.

 

 

not everyone will like you

Jun 29 2014

Sunday Seven #80s throwback that compares Voltron to my books

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A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday.

 

 

Comparing the Voltron Lion Force to my Existence series

 

1-

Voltron – Keith, pilot of the black lion that forms the head, is the levelheaded Captain who puts his crew and planet first. His romantic feelings for Allura tend to distract him.

 

Existence – Xavier is considered the leader of the group. The needs of the world are his priority. His love and longing for Gwendolyn cloud his judgment.

 

2-

Voltron – Lance, pilot of the red lion that forms the right arm, is second in command. He’s tall, quick with a joke, a bit of a hothead at times, and a true ladies’ man.

Voltron  – Hunk is the pilot of the yellow lion that forms the left leg. His mass is attributed to his muscles. He’s known for sticking up innocents in need of a defender.

 

Existence  – Heath is considered the second in command of the group, and Xavier’s right hand man. He’s tall and muscular, and occasionally mistaken for a chiseled statue created as an ode to male body perfection. His temper comes out when he’s being protective (he’s the bully of bullies). The legend of his seduction power is almost unbelievable… which naturally tempts more to find out if the rumors are true. (They are.)

 

3-

Voltron – Princess Allura pilots the blue lion that forms the right leg. She’s a bit naïve when it comes to romance. It turns out that she’s far more powerful than one would guess at first sight. There’s undeniable bravery in her.

 

Existence  – Gwendolyn, nicknamed Wend, is not experienced with romantic relationships due to her conservative upbringing. Powers dwell inside her, fighting to get out, but she’s too oblivious to realize the truth of her own nature. It is the change she elects, the choice to be brave and take the unknown road, which gives book one, Fractions of Existence, a major plot twist.

 

4-

Voltron – Pidge, pilot of the green lion that forms the left arm, is the smallest group member in stature. He’s a brainy scientist. He has a twin brother named Chip.

 

Existence  – Caleb and Jun are both smaller in stature than the others. Caleb knows more about animal sciences, zoology, and veterinary medicine than anyone in the world does. He has a crush on Heath. Jun is a botanist expert, but focuses his life around music, especially nightclubs.

 

5-

Voltron has a Blazing Sword and eventually Blazing Pistols.

Jezebel in the Existence Series is the equivalent of these weapons. Jez is fully aware of who she is and what she is capable of, unlike Gwendolyn.

 

 

6-

 

When not fully combined, Voltron is not at full power. In Fractions of Existence, Xavier cites the importance of reuniting his kind. His need to seek out Gwendolyn is not purely romantic. Keith would direct the group to rescue Princess Allura, not only because of his feelings for her, but because the team needs the blue lion. Without Gwendolyn, Xavier’s group is weakened, and cannot hope to defeat The Eyes in the Shadows.

 

7-

VoltronKing Zarkon of the Drule Empire is the leader of Voltron’s enemies from Planet Doom. Oppression, enslavement, and total obedience are the cornerstones of this government. A witch named Haggar, at the beckon call of His Majesty, uses dark magic to cast spells.

 

Existence  – The Eyes in the Shadows believe they must bring about Armageddon, for humanity was not intended to exist this long. They have made this choice for the world without consulting anyone. Their previous attempts have failed. They believe the failure is because “Xavier’s kind” exists. So far, they have managed to separate part of that group. If they can destroy a group member, or separate the entire group, they will be able to use an ancient dark magic to end human life on Earth.

 

 

Can you name a literary equivalent of the Voltron television series or comic books?

 

 

Jun 27 2014

Midway Through This Year Goals

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Half the year is gone! Can I remain on track for the next half? Thanks to my participation in this hop, I believe that I can. So here’s my current goals and review of goals from the past:

 

The BIG MAIN GOAL:

  • Publish two decent-selling book series

 

2014 Goals:

  • Publish something every week on this blog (ie: Sunday Seven)
  • Have 5000 Twitter followers ~ currently at 3,505 — up 90 from last month!

 

Goals for July:

  • Keep up on Twitter follows
  • Remember to tweet for #WW #WriterWednesday  and  #ReaderhuRsday #RR
  • Participate in Camp NanoWriMo
  • Enter the writing contest my instructor recommended
  • Keep up with the fantasy writing class
  • Move on to the next lesson in the writing for youth class
  • Visit and comment on 30 other blogs
  • Vote and watch #WRiTECLUB2014 every Monday and Thursday
  • Update / redo what-are-they.com and existenceseries.com
  • Finish reading 2 books

 

~For those of you who want to set goals,

but are unsure where to start-

click here to check out a bucket list!

I did not write it,

but I am half way through it. ~

Choosing a goal and sticking to it changes everything quote found on the blog of J Lenni Dorner

Review of Goals for June:

  • Keep up with the Fantasy writing class I’m taking. (Only 2 parts left!) ~ Accomplished
  • Complete homework for lesson 2 for the writing for youth readers class ~ Accomplished
  • Figure out the rules/ logic for this grammar question

Survey results:

“Bob, someone is at my desk waiting to meet you. Come with me.” Said Tom.

“Bob, someone is at my desk waiting to meet you. Come with me,” said Tom.

image of survey results

Expert answers:

http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/he-said-she-said

For a short line of dialogue, attributives usually go at the end, like so:

“Help me find my leopard skin pillbox hat,” said Daphne.

http://www.itsuckstobejoe.com/jdn/writing/punctuation.html

INCORRECT :

“I’m looking for some trash bags.” Said Murdock.

CORRECTED :

“I’m looking for some trash bags,” said Murdock.

(“said” is kept lowercase, and a comma is used, NOT a period.)

  ~ Accomplished

  • Visit at least 30 A to Z challenge blogs on the “road trip” ~ Accomplished
  • Celebrate Native American Citizenship Day on the 15th ~ Accomplished
  • Celebrate my dad on Father’s Day on the 15th ~ Accomplished
  • On June 16, be 1 of the 32 #WRiTECLUB2014 ~ I’ll get back to you on that
  • Work on my fantasy book series/ collection ~ Mentally, yes. Actual writing… umm…not as much as I’d have liked.
  • catch up on Twitter follows ~ Partly Accomplished
  • post results from the vestibule survey and contest ~ Accomplished
  • Spread the word about my assistant’s aunt’s missing cat ~ Accomplished (Cat still missing though.)

 

 

Review of Other Previous Goals:

  • To get 300 signers on the what-are-they.com guestbook.  ~ currently at 117
  • To get a literary agent.  ~ Still working on it.
  • To finish writing book two of the existence series.   ~On hold.
  • Work on Fraction of Existence rewrite ~ Not much progress this month
  • Work on the other fantasy book series ~ Not much progress this month
  • Work on query letter ~ Not much progress this month

 

query tip

 

Jun 25 2014

Survey Says

Congratulations to Jan Lee, winner of the Is Flash Intro a Vestibule contest!

For those who were hoping to know, here are some of the survey results:

Some people are easily lost. A vestibule confuses them to the point that they cannot shop at large stores or eat at certain restaurants. It's very sad.

Some people are easily lost. A vestibule confuses them to the point that they cannot shop at large stores or eat at certain restaurants. It’s very sad.
vestibule image

reason for visiting the site

Some people are not very committed. When intentionally going to the site, if there is an introduction, they will leave rather than click past it.

That is disturbing. One wonders why intro is even an option. I also wonder why people quit so easily.

 

Interest level in books after seeing video

current mood

post video viewing emotions

Should youtube replace my flash intro

Looks like I’m going to need to redo my website!

 

 

Have you ever heard of the Lenni Lenape Native American tribe

I wish that result shocked me more.

Jun 23 2014

Express Your Latest Read and I am 9 on the blog of @TwiterHero



Express Meme June image
Children’s: BEARS: Fun Facts and Amazing Photos of Animals in Nature (Amazing Animal Kingdom Book 7) by Emma Child
I hate writing reviews of books that I do not love. I would give this a 3 out of 5 stars. It is alright, but in my opinion, they editor fell a bit short. There’s a certain “snap” missing, which matters to me when reading to a child. It does give a basic bear education, which is good.

Classic Fiction: The Time Machine by HG Wells
I’d forgotten how enjoyable this book is. It earns all five out of five stars. It is a classic for a reason.
I also forgot how much smoking was once part of the culture. I can imagine censorship groups and anti-youth-smoking groups battling over certain passages.

 

I’m reading a few other books at the moment, but have not finished them at the time of writing this post.

KITTY HAS! Click for Pin.
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I’m number nine on the follow blog TwiterHero this week!

SCREENSHOT:
TwiterHero Twitter Hero I am 9 image

For those who desire an increase in followers on Twitter who are real people, this is a very big deal. I’m excited. How excited?

 

(Some readers may recall that I was #23 back in April.)

Jun 22 2014

Initial Forenames Sunday Seven by J

Sunday Seven image

A list of seven of something- brought to you on Sunday. What can you add?

People with initials for first names.

If you did NOT know what the initial stood for, and could NOT refer to the person by surname, other nicknames, or substitute in other words, here are seven people you would have to call by letter(s) :

 

  1. J.R.R. Tolkien
  2. M. Night Shyamalan (I’ve never heard anyone refer to him as simply “Night,” have you?)
  3. H.G. Wells
  4. F. Scott Fitzgerald (Do people ever just call him Scott?)
  5. J.D. Salinger
  6. J.K. Rowling (Before the world knew it was Jo, many referred to her as J.K.)
  7. E.B. White

 

Related topic:

The “S” in Harry S. Truman does not stand for anything. The initial S was his middle name, in honor of his grandfathers, Anderson Shipp Truman and Solomon Young.

 

So really, it is acceptable (and preferable) to just call me J. :)

Jun 19 2014

Express Yourself with a Scary Movie



Express Meme June image

1h33m38s

Granted, I saw this movie when I was younger, so that is probably what freaked me out. Well, that and the “based on a true story” stuff.

Horror movies in general do not freak me out. Most make me laugh.

 

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