Dec 19 2014

Déjà vu Get Your #dejavu2014 Can’t Tell an #AtoZchallenge from a Vision Quest without it

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Regular readers know that I debated between at least seven posts when deciding which of these to go with. Ultimately, I went with this one, from the A to Z challenge 2014, because it was so fun to write. I created an entire story this year, and broke it down into each of the letter days. Naturally, most guests were only able to read one post, as there were over 1000 blogs to visit. Most of my posts were noticed, commented on, and were liked. This one was overlooked. That’s a shame, because this is my second favorite from the series. (My favorite was the next one, W is for Water, where in the main character chats with a lobster. But it makes little sense without reading this one first.)

So, here it is. Reposted for your reading pleasure. I hope you enjoy. Thanks for stopping in!



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All alone in this sealed off room.


I pound on the door until I can no longer lift my limbs. I search along the cracks for any way to pry it open, but none exists. I search through my backpack for anything of use. The contents hidden within are a small bandage, a blue paperclip, a pen that ran dry, my keys, the plastic baggy that held the torch, an eight-ounce bottle of water, and the crystal pendulum. None of this is of any use to get the door open. Thirsty from my efforts, I drink the water. I want to conserve it, to drink it slow over time, but I end up chugging the whole bottle.


It is believed by my tribe that fasting increases a person’s ability to contact and influence the great spirits. It is by these means, this Vision Quest, that we can meet our Guardian Spirit. As the only source of food around me is in the form of seeds, spices, sugar, and salt, I may as well fast. I very well might die down here. Does that mean that I’ll fail? I was chosen for this. It was supposed to be my destiny or something to come down here today. What does it mean if my true fate is to die?


I probably have three days to live. After that, without water, I will die.


This seems like a good time to break down in tears, but I just can’t. Those tears would be wasted liquid. It isn’t worth it. I sit up straight. My legs turn and tuck, so that my calves and the top of my feet touch the ground, my thighs rotating to the side. I resolve to remain like this.

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My mind clears. Finding inner silence has never been my strong suit, but this is the perfect opportunity to work on it. I focus on my breathing. I focus on each breath. I fade away.


Time passes. Minutes, hours, days. My stomach tries to interrupt my peaceful calm, but I chose to ignore it. I much prefer meditating in the forest, but this is where I am, so this is where I must be.


It’s time to open your eyes.


There’s a voice inside my mind that isn’t my own.


Yes, there is. Open your eyes.


I look around the room. It is as I remember, though the fire has dwindled considerably.


Come over to the two large jars you did not open.


I cross to the corner of the room, as instructed.


Open the one decorated with images of the ocean.




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Thank you so much for stopping by. I hope we can become regular visitors of each other. If you enjoyed this, consider stopping back to read the rest of the story, or perhaps looking into my recent contest entry which won publication in an anthology:


“I have a list and a map. What could possibly go wrong?”

Short story contest winners, short-listed finalists, judges, invited award winning guests and CWI staff had fun answering that question. They produced 30 very different, thought-provoking plots. Genres include general fiction, humor, fantasy, romance, dystopian, horror and sci-fi.

WRONG!: A themed anthology 2014 includes a short story by @JLenniDorner


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    • Beth on December 19, 2014 at 10:56 AM

    I loved this!! “I probably have three days to live. After that, without water, I will die.” such a good, strong line.
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    1. I’m glad you liked the line.

  1. I missed A-Z this year, and therefore I missed your series as well. Easily rectified! Thank you for re-sharing this with us today. 🙂
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    1. Thank you for this fantastic hop. You’re a wonderful person.

    • Chris on December 19, 2014 at 1:00 PM

    Interesting story! It sounds like the locked room vision quest was rewarded.

    Happy Deja Vu!
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    1. Indeed. Thanks for stopping in.

    • C. on December 19, 2014 at 2:49 PM

    You were right in finally settling on this repost. I really did enjoy reading it. I missed so many great AtoZ posts last year. Thanks for letting me see this one at last.
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    1. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

  2. Interesting story. I want to know what’s in the jar! I’ll have to go back and read your story starting with A. That’s a neat idea to break a story up into 26 parts in alphabetical order. Can’t wait to check it out!
    Glad to have found you on the Deja Vu Blogfest. Hope you’re enjoying it too.
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    1. Thanks so much. I love the A to Z challenge. 🙂

    • Hilary on December 21, 2014 at 6:12 AM

    Hi Lenni – an interesting repost … and what a great V part this must fall into your story … the creativity of your mind stands out .. good to read .. cheers and have a happy Christmas week run up … Hilary
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    1. Thank you. And a Merry Christmas to you too.

    • Suzanne on December 28, 2014 at 4:24 PM

    Pretty sure I never landed on your blog during the A-Z, but then there’s so many it’s easy to miss some great ones – and reading a story each day would have been great 🙂 And your character sounds just like me when I meditate! xx
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    1. Thanks for stopping in. I modeled the character after myself.

  3. Okay, I’ll have to go back and read what happened! I like the idea of going within to find and answer, even if that answer is just to wait. Great job, and thanks for leaving a comment on my blog!
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    1. Absolutely. Thanks for stopping by.

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