Apr 25 2016

#atozchallenge U is for Understanding POV #Writing Point of View #WriteTip

#atozchallenge U is for Understanding POV #Writing Point of View #WriteTip

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U is for “Understanding”
Book: Point Of View: Understanding Which P.O.V. is Best for Your Story and Using it Effectively by Alfie Thompson
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Lesson: Some rules for effective POV

Avoid “felt” words, such as: felt, saw, thought, suspected, wondered, wished, figured, expected. Show us what’s going on in the mind or heart of the character.

Be careful when using “as if” in descriptions. “The car was old, as old as if Henry Ford himself had driven it off the assembly line.” That could be tweaked.

Characters should speak with the same voice as when they think, normally. Don’t change the vocabulary or accent, unless there’s a very good reason (like the character is lying about their identity).

Use the five senses to bring out details in a scene and reflect who the character is. Texture, shape, size, and smell are good descriptors.

Let thoughts, actions, and speech show emotions. Avoid emotional adverbs like angrily, happily, sadly, joyfully, etc.

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Wend’s car announced her arrival at the small blue house with a loud squeak from the brakes, a noisy puttering from the engine, and the door squealing in protest at being opened. Bits of rust crashed onto the pavement as she slammed the door shut and then pressed against it with her hip, until the latch finally clicked. She wiggled her key in the lock of the trunk. “Come on, Poppy Jalopy,” she said to the mostly reddish-orange car. The trunk finally gave way so she could retrieve her bag.

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Can you tell that Wend’s car isn’t brand new and perfect? Do you sense that she’s frustrated without the emotion being mentioned? Can you imagine what this car sounds like?

Have you ever watched the movie “Uncle Buck?”

What might be another example of a book or movie with a beat up car?

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    • Sudha on April 25, 2016 at 3:55 AM

    Love the example and the post! Cheers
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    • Deniz on April 25, 2016 at 7:59 AM

    You’ve got some great links in your post! Love Uncle Buck 🙂
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  1. I’m quite taken with that dragon reading a book!
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  2. Fab piece, so much better than saying “Wend was frustrated at her old banger!” I love that you illustrate the advice in a piece of writing
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  3. Great example! I could picture Wend and the car easily.
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    • Juneta on April 26, 2016 at 1:49 PM

    Some good things to think about and I am sure I am guilty of doing too. Good example. Never seen Uncle Buck.

    Beat up cars in books and movies? , well movies Transformers, Love Bug, Chitty, Chitty Bang, Bang,

    Books, Dresden files Jim Butcher — Dresden drives a beat up car which is in more than one book until it is destroyed but he gets another old car but it is not the same. The Walker Papers C E Murphy — The protagonist car is part of her character in a way it is always something she cares about do you do and its beat up and defines her personality.

    Great post.
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    • gail on April 26, 2016 at 3:40 PM

    learning from example is very helpful. Your descriptive piece did the job!
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  4. I do have trouble getting the characters to show their emotions without tagging them. But at least I know that – so it’s on my ‘edit’ list. Sometimes difficult when wanting to keep the action flowing, though!
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